Check my song out, feedback appreciated

[that wave]

What do I need to work on? and no I'm not going to quit so any feedback would be appreciated

this is only my third track I've ever actually recorded, so I'm new in the game but been writing for a minute...

http://usershare.net/32hg25c6fwd5

 

[that wave]

Blase - Gift N the Curse

this link works better
http://limelinx.com/files...0eefc728ef1317e4a63e6f9c

 

[luigitheking]

Can't hear you very clearly and the flows pretty awkward, and doesn't even fit the beat.

 

[that wave]

iight appreciate it...yea flow is a work in progress