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No, I get it. I know you think of what you are writing as poetic and that rap is modern poetry or something. That's fine. But I don't buy it.
New poetry thread!! Yaaaay!! lol
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And I wasn't selling it. That's more of a difference than what you pointed out. The thing is, it's hard to accurately transcribe what makes poetry feel different than rap. It's even harder to take that transcription, translate it to a formatted structured form, and keep the meter in tact without making it read like a rap verse.. I mean, on some corny %++%.. I could do all sorts of eye-catching things with color and font size to help better convey the mood and pace of the %++% I write.. but it ain't that serious. You don't care. And I care less than that. But you're half right though. I do think of rap as modern day poetry.
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Right
I want to try it
The fancy of it all entices me
And it also frightens me
I can do this poetry
But can I try my hand at prose
It takes more than rhyming together words
You have to really make up your mind
Along with that of others
Whoever reads it will take on the role
Of the observer, the critic
Steadily criticizing the work of a writer
Ahh, a writer
It sounds so sacred
So only reserved for those few
Those who make it
Have the pleasure of knowing
That somewhere in the world
Someone is really getting a pleasure
Out of reading their words
Of watching their story unfold
Seeing your origami before their eyes
All of the creases and folds
The ingenuity of it all
I want to try it
The fancy of it all entices me
And it also frightens me
I can do this poetry
But can I try my hand at prose
It takes more than rhyming together words
You have to really make up your mind
Along with that of others
Whoever reads it will take on the role
Of the observer, the critic
Steadily criticizing the work of a writer
Ahh, a writer
It sounds so sacred
So only reserved for those few
Those who make it
Have the pleasure of knowing
That somewhere in the world
Someone is really getting a pleasure
Out of reading their words
Of watching their story unfold
Seeing your origami before their eyes
All of the creases and folds
The ingenuity of it all
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one kiss\
one kiss could make me happy today.
one kiss could make the rain go away.
one kiss could bring me to a smile.
one kiss could keep me going for miles.
one kiss could get rid of my pain.
one kiss would travel from vein to vein.
one kiss could make a day seem like forever.
one kiss would make me feel light as a feather.
one kiss will make me forget the world.
one kiss will make you my girl.
one kiss and i will be eternally hooked,
one kiss and i will be internally shook.
one kiss and i would give her my heart,
one kiss is only the start.
one kiss could make me happy today.
one kiss could make the rain go away.
one kiss could bring me to a smile.
one kiss could keep me going for miles.
one kiss could get rid of my pain.
one kiss would travel from vein to vein.
one kiss could make a day seem like forever.
one kiss would make me feel light as a feather.
one kiss will make me forget the world.
one kiss will make you my girl.
one kiss and i will be eternally hooked,
one kiss and i will be internally shook.
one kiss and i would give her my heart,
one kiss is only the start.
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Shepherd of deception
Cloaked in the skin of their own
Waits in incubation to spread disease
A sinister growth gestating in the ##%*% of God
A parasite's host; glorified charlatan
A virgin womb defiled with the slithering parasitic seed of the xenochrist
Adequately equipped with weapons of manipulation
Prophet of contamination
Bow to the savior of the fearful and desperate
Lured with the promise of eternal life
(An enigmatic) sentinel of malevolence
Dispensing false salvation
Prophet of contamination
Bethlehem will burn
Shepherd of deception
Prophet of infection
Behold the xenochrist
The Faceless-Xenochrist
Cloaked in the skin of their own
Waits in incubation to spread disease
A sinister growth gestating in the ##%*% of God
A parasite's host; glorified charlatan
A virgin womb defiled with the slithering parasitic seed of the xenochrist
Adequately equipped with weapons of manipulation
Prophet of contamination
Bow to the savior of the fearful and desperate
Lured with the promise of eternal life
(An enigmatic) sentinel of malevolence
Dispensing false salvation
Prophet of contamination
Bethlehem will burn
Shepherd of deception
Prophet of infection
Behold the xenochrist
The Faceless-Xenochrist
bottom74bottom
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Well, ya lost me..
antonlavey
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Originally Posted by BOTTOM74BOTTOM
Well, ya lost me.... not today man. I ain't got it in me. .
bottom74bottom
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I just made it to "@%*%+ of God" this time... laughed... shook my head, and quit.. you really went there huh? Boy you something else entirely..
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I Wish It Wouldn't Spread
I wish it wouldn't spread
Lord knows I wish it wouldn't spread
Lying in my bed, I heard the news
Little balls in her bladder
She had to get removed
I was such a young little fool
That it didn't affect me
'She'll be alright you see
She's my mommy'
But deep down I was worried
That maybe she wouldn't be
Maybe those little laser beams
Would miss the mark
Maybe I'd have to live this life
Without her heart, beating
Spending the rest of my days, grieving
She's alive and well, doing better than ever
It didn't spread
It didn't spread
I wish it wouldn't spread
Lord knows I wish it wouldn't spread
Lying in my bed, I heard the news
Little balls in her bladder
She had to get removed
I was such a young little fool
That it didn't affect me
'She'll be alright you see
She's my mommy'
But deep down I was worried
That maybe she wouldn't be
Maybe those little laser beams
Would miss the mark
Maybe I'd have to live this life
Without her heart, beating
Spending the rest of my days, grieving
She's alive and well, doing better than ever
It didn't spread
It didn't spread
balloonoboy
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I Love Their Love
I love their love
No, I envy their love
I wish my love was like theirs
In the air, there
Everywhere you look around
There's their love
I hate that I can't love like them
Or I just haven't been given the chance
To show my own kind of love, unique
A love that peaks high above Kilimanjaro
And erupts like Vesuvius
It oozes like slime
And it entwines like a vine
It's sweet like a grape
But will get you tipsy like wine
It won't be like their love
The one that I hate
It will be like a love that I love
The love that I made
I love their love
No, I envy their love
I wish my love was like theirs
In the air, there
Everywhere you look around
There's their love
I hate that I can't love like them
Or I just haven't been given the chance
To show my own kind of love, unique
A love that peaks high above Kilimanjaro
And erupts like Vesuvius
It oozes like slime
And it entwines like a vine
It's sweet like a grape
But will get you tipsy like wine
It won't be like their love
The one that I hate
It will be like a love that I love
The love that I made
balloonoboy
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Tabula Rasa
Now I know I'm not crazy
Not going through all-timer's
Heck, I'm still a baby, relatively
But I could have sworn there was someone
Who, meant so much to me
Who I would die for
I just can't even remember its name
It's like I've gone through epilepsy
And I can't recall a damn thing
As if the seizures have besieged my membranes
Taken capture of what once made me sane
The thoughts, emotions, and memories are gone
I don't even long anymore
But for whom, I'll never know
I must have been sleepwalking
Daydreaming of what it must feel like
Now I know I'm not crazy
Not going through all-timer's
Heck, I'm still a baby, relatively
But I could have sworn there was someone
Who, meant so much to me
Who I would die for
I just can't even remember its name
It's like I've gone through epilepsy
And I can't recall a damn thing
As if the seizures have besieged my membranes
Taken capture of what once made me sane
The thoughts, emotions, and memories are gone
I don't even long anymore
But for whom, I'll never know
I must have been sleepwalking
Daydreaming of what it must feel like
balloonoboy
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Nothing
Maybe it would be best
If death
Came and swept
Me
Out of this depth
I hate breath
It requires too much energy
No one sees how beautiful
I can be
How loving I am
What can I do for them to understand
I can't even stand
I can't even be a man
Contemplating taking the coward's route
Thinking things won't get better
Living in luxury but still wanting more cheddar
More bread and butter
More milk and honey
More shelter
A warmth unlike any other
Love
Attention
I need it so badly right now
At this very moment
This very instant
@#@$ no one can understand
Just what an emblem of hope
An inkling of promise
An iota of respect would do for me right now
This very moment
I'm contemplating
I'm no longer waiting
I want to end it
I want to die
Maybe it would be best
If death
Came and swept
Me
Out of this depth
I hate breath
It requires too much energy
No one sees how beautiful
I can be
How loving I am
What can I do for them to understand
I can't even stand
I can't even be a man
Contemplating taking the coward's route
Thinking things won't get better
Living in luxury but still wanting more cheddar
More bread and butter
More milk and honey
More shelter
A warmth unlike any other
Love
Attention
I need it so badly right now
At this very moment
This very instant
@#@$ no one can understand
Just what an emblem of hope
An inkling of promise
An iota of respect would do for me right now
This very moment
I'm contemplating
I'm no longer waiting
I want to end it
I want to die
